Template:Did you know nominations/Adolescence of Utena
- updated 2019/11/03 22:44
The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by Yoninah (talk) 22:44, 3 November 2019 (UTC)
5x expanded by Morgan695 (talk). Self-nominated at 04:01, 12 October 2019 (UTC).
Article has been 5x expanded on 12 October (3,920 to 21,132) therefore is new and long enough. NPOV, effective use of citations. No obvious copyvio, paraphrasing. QPQ provided which is sufficient as assesses appropriate criteria. In terms of issues, the whole cast list is unsourced. There are grammatical errors. The sentence that starts with "The film is noted for its..." makes no sense. "rose-engraved engraved ring identical to one he was wearing after he departs" also. "by Akio voice actor" (probably Akio's). " The film has also screened" (change to was). In terms of the hooks, they due meet the requirements of DYK however could I suggest that a hook be written based around the climax of the film being the main character turning into a pink sports car? This would be more interesting of a hook. Cowlibob (talk) 19:34, 15 October 2019 (UTC)
@Cowlibob: Requested edits have been made. I have added an ALT3, with the caveat that it may not satisfy WP:DYKHOOK ("If the subject is a work of fiction or a fictional character, the hook must involve the real world in some way."). Morgan695 (talk) 20:42, 15 October 2019 (UTC)
Good to go now, thanks for making the changes. Cowlibob (talk) 09:19, 16 October 2019 (UTC)